Initially this was inspired by the Lion King - it was supposed to be stars instead of snow, and I thought of Simba looking up at his forefathers. However, due to personal circumstances, this piece took on a lot more personal meaning over the past week and a half, and brought about some of the changes. It was also my first time working with my brand-spanking-new tablet (yay!). I still need to work on my hair painting technique though, meh.
wow, i seriously love this. the concept, the way its laid out ect. What an eye catcher!
I love the way you made the snow horse, it as the perfect amount of detail to clearly see the shape and form of the horse, but not too much to look off. the only thing I would say on that, its make some snow flakes darker then others, just to give it some more depth? like, some of the snowflakes (darker) are behind other ones (lighter)
The other thing that is bothering me is the lighting on the horse. On the ground it shows the lighting coming from the top, so you should of had the top parts of the horse lighter then the bottom. Now, as for the horse itself, its very rough at 'wooden' looking. Id advice looking at some prepping tutorials on DA, so you can smooth out the horse and add some more details.
I really like the hair, the only real crit on that would be to use smaller strands to make fading whisps so it doesnt look so choppy
last but not least, you need a shadow on the ground from the horse!
thats all that I can see that needs improvement again, im in love with the concept! keep up the good work
Okay so FINALLY I have 40min to write the decent critique you asked for.^^
Overall, we are looking at a scene that depicts the intimate moment of a living being longing to be with someone unreachable, who is, however, still there, somehow.
First, the depth within this theme is awesome. You can do so much with it and as a viewer you wonder why and how it all came to this. And, I need to say this, GREAT job on picking the stock for the living horse. This pose is so full of desire and longing you can almost feel it yourself.
On the other hand, I feel like the snow horse is kinda indifferent towards the other one. Idk, maybe you did it on purpose (to make the longing of the living horse stand out even more) but at the same time it looks like the snow horse doesn't really care about the longing of the living. MAybe you could have tried to give it a little more emotion (difficult to find stock, I know, especially since it's "flying"), to make it look like it's trying to comfort the living horse, and sad at the same time that it can't really help its lover/friend/whatever. Maybe the noses could (almost) touch or something. You know... what horses do when they like each other.^^
In terms of originality, it is, as the vision is bigger, far more original than the last one I critiqued, but at the same time... well. You know as well that this idea has been there before (aka The Lion King) - but as this is not a horse in a pond you'll still get 4 stars for that one.^^
Technique... *switches back to the page to look at it closely* ... ... The horse - looks a little bit too smudged. I miss the winter-fur texture... You don't need to smudge it that much and it'll be fine. (Don't worry, I did that as well^^). ... The snow horse - I agree with peaches, some bigger, some smaller, some lighter and some darker snowflakes would make it more realistic and give it more depth. Plus, you could have made them a little "fuzzier", right now they are a bit too sharp in my opinion. Other than that, it is a great idea and you realised it very well. (I would have been too lazy I bet ;D). ... The snow - could use some more variety in terms of direction. When I look at the breath of the horse, the wind does not seem to be that straight, but rather, well, indefinite. ... Lighting: I miss a light source. I know, it's at night and it is cloudy (since it couldn't snow otherwise^^) but I miss a realistic or, well, fantasy light source. Like this, the light is not clearly defined, which is why you put much more light on the ground than on the horse. (This is hard, I know... one suggestion: you could make the snow glow. That'd give it some magical, mysterious feeling and light up the horse from below). I'll still give you 4 stars for technique, because despite all my critique, this is not that easy to paint and you still did it pretty decently. The things I mentioned are kinda small compared to the thing you did RIGHT.^^
Impact, finally... well as I said, I love the pose of the real horse. It is really, really strong, it makes it easy for me to feel its desire and longing and pain. Therefore, you'll get 5 stars. Not because it'll change the world, but simply because this is one of the few horse manips here on dA that I won't forget that soon...
thank you so much! Translating meaning into art is always pretty difficult, so I am still quite proud of this piece even though my technique has improved by leaps and bounds in the year since I made that piece.
And keep at it! The majority of the battle is just making your subject look as though it belongs in the location you place it. Pay attention to the small details, as they're what ultimately ties a piece together.
I haven't been manipping myself that long - I'm just a perfectionist. c:
That's stunning, I love the idea! Even if I am not a huge fan of all kind of photo manipulations, I think this one is fantastic, because it has a deeper meaning... Something more than just a perfect horse on a perfect background. Hope you understand what I mean... Wonderful work!